Broken Wings

I agree with Miyaviloves. It IS very cliche. And it is also kind of...blah. You don't feel the emotions that you should be feeling with this poem, and there is ...

I enjoyed this very, very much. Great detail, wonderfully written, no typos or misspellings, and perfect grammar! I do hope you write more to this story. One thing, however, irritated ...

Way, way too many typos. Don't be sloppy with your work; double check it, always! Especially if it is for school. The typos distract me from other grammar and actual ...

I really enjoyed this story, but I couldn't find a ...theme or moral of any kind. It was a nice little story, quite interesting, and very well written, but no ...

As a fearful blush darkens by ears; A venomous look that sends chills down my spine. His hair standing up on his back, deep brown; A venomous look that sends ...

It is a very sweet poem, but it's a little dry. It could be very colorful and interesting, if you used a bigger vocabulary and maybe make the sentences a ...

That was so sweet and romantic! I think I've read five times before I've posted this! I just love the ending, how it's almost like a cliffhanger but not and ...

This almost made me want to cry, which, for 1 AM in the morning, is pretty dang good. It is extremely emotional, sweet, and the whole meaning behind it is ...

I'm with Imp on this one...and spellcheck your stuff too, some things are misspelled. And there are a couple typos. Please review your work before you post it here. It ...

Oh, that's so sad. I almost, cried, and it takes a lot for me to do that. The only mistakes are the ones Claudette pointed out, and please capitalize your ...

I've only read the first chapter, because I don't have time to read the rest (but I do want to, and will get to it! Don't worry!) and so far, ...

Is that the end of the story? Or is this going to be chapter book? Because if that's the end.... :shock: *inches away from Myth* I didn't find anything that ...

The name sounds too similiar to the first book of the Chronicles of Narnia...I suggest you change it.... o-O But I suck at coming up with names so don't look ...

It's very good, good grammar and spelling. But this part annoys me: An angel stands over me, Brilliant white and smiling, A symbol of grace eternally. Just a pat on ...

Yes! Please add more soon! This is beautiful writing, and I can't wait for more! I'll be checking back as often as I can :wink: With such a small piece, ...